Because
SCIgen attempts to imitate the style and form of scholarly work, the
conventions are very similar. However, when directly comparing it to one
specific scholarly article, “Considering Culturally Responsive
Teaching, Children, and Place in the Music Room” by: Wiens, Kimberly
Friesen, some
differences are brought to the surface.
Simply
by looking at the articles without yet reading them the structure and form are
very similar both articles are separated into section of about a paragraph long
and each is labeled to inform the read what will be discussed. Furthermore,
SCIgen imitates the labeled Introduction, Conclusion, and References in the
article as well, this done to demonstrate to the reader the point of the author
is well introduced in the introduction, proven in the conclusion, and
researched seen in he references. The structure is very important because it
should look professional and the structure should correlate with the purpose of
the article; because the article is made to introduce a discovery, show proof,
and conclude with tying it all together, the article labels it throughout to
show which point will be proven there to make the greater idea proven farther
and finally concluded in the end.
Although the structure between the
two articles is similar, SCIgen does add a few diagrams and drafts which is its
version of presenting data adding ethos to their piece by implementing
credibility because of the usage of graphs used from outside references. In contrast, the Music Room article does not
have a lot of graphs but its paragraphs are significantly longer than those of
the SCIgen article, showing possibly the more elaborated information that it
has in comparison to the SCIgen article.
Considering that the articles are
suppose to be proving a point not only should the structure correlate it, but
the style should as well. Both articles
contain a didactic tone, because the articles are teaching the audience its
discovery and should come off as knowledgeable. Additionally, both articles
almost immediately introduce the idea they want to prove, with little to no
“fluff,” because their topic is straightforward and research based there may
not be need for it, it should be straight to the point. Being a researched
based article it does not feel the need to sound persuasive, but it wants to
sound informative which further explains the little to no fluff aspect.
Because they are scholarly pieces or
are imitating one, it is aimed at audience that already has quite a bit of
knowledge of the discipline. With this said, both articles contain jargon of
their discipline, to compliment their credibility and didactic knowledgeable
tone. However, the Music Room article does also try to use a lot of everyday
vocabulary as well, which definitely makes it easier to read even though it is
directed at music teachers. In contrast, the SCIgen article is even hard to
finish, and contains so much jargon that it can be nearly impossible to finish
or get through because after all it is imitating a scholarly piece, but because
the Music Room piece is a legitimate academic piece it is directed at a certain
audience but does not make it too difficult to read if the person is not
included in the directed audience.
Both of course are trying to prove a
discovery, however, being the SCIgen is not really a good source the reader can
recognize that it is actually trying to be nearly impossible to read in an
attempt to make a full affect. In contrast to the Music Room article that is
point is proven that teachers should not just teach students but teachers
should learn from them. They should learn if they play instrument from a different
culture, they should learn different learning skills, and how students like to
learn, alone vs. group, in silence vs. with noise, etc. The article was
basically trying to reach out to not just music teachers but all teachers that
it is important to be sure that students are learning in an environment that is
courtesy to their needs, and this point can be seen whether the reader is a
music teacher or not. On the other hand, it is really difficult to point out
the SCIgen article because it made no attempts to simplify or breakdown its
point even the introduction was difficult to follow. Therefore, the Music Room article
definitely had a more poignant even if it didn’t “sound” as “scholarly.”
I really liked your approach to comparing the two sources and how you mentioned that the SCIgen is basically a fake copy of the scholarly articles. You explained the conventions very well so that somebody who has not read the articles, would be able to visualize what they look like. Even though the scholarly article did not contain diagrams, was there a table of data? How did the music article perform its study? By the way, I also loved your usage of "jargon" because that is not a word I see a lot when reading! Good job!
ReplyDeleteYour PB is really good and I really enjoyed how you used a lot of vocabulary from class, it really shows how you are bringing everything we have learned into your actual writing. I think you did a great job comparing and contrasting both articles and really dug deep into the characteristics. I think it would have been cool if you clearly stated the answer to the second part of PB 2A in the introduction or something because I was a little confused as to where you answered what aspect strike you as most important. Overall, your format is very clear and flows really nicely.
ReplyDeleteI love the brevity of your introduction because it is still very clear to the readers about what you are going to talk about. I also like how you organized your paragraphs by first introducing factors that can be seen without even reading the articles. That is something I had never realized. When you discuss the persuasiveness in an article, maybe clarify the line between what makes something persuasive and what makes something simply informative. While I agree there is a difference, I am unsure about where the line is drawn sometimes, especially when it comes to the content of these scholarly articles. Overall, great read! I look forward to more!
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